Daddy, I love you

by kemunto omare
  • April 26, 2009
  • Poetry
  • Dramatic

As the sun sets and night paints itself in,
I see a little star in your eyes;
A star so bright and its light undying
Just like your love for me.

As I hide in your closet
And smell your shirts,
I feel your presence around me.
It is almost like you never were about to leave me.

As I look at your pictures
And cherish sweet memories,
A candle is lit in my heart;
And nothing in this world can extinguish it.

Because just like your love,
My hope can never diminish.
It is stronger each day.
It is fueled by love; your love.

They say you never know what you have,
Until what you have is gone
But I’m happy you never really went.
You almost did but you didn’t.

Now I know what I have.
I love what I’ve always had.
From now I will cherish every moment,
Especially those moments when I tell you a little secret.

It used to be the hardest thing ever.
But the more I say it, the happier I feel.
So here’s the thing;
Daddy, I love you.

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closetwriter Review
closetwriter wrote a review · Sun Apr 26, 2009 10:48 pm

I love this poem!! The imagery is amazing! I love the first stanza about the night sky and the star in your eye. I also love "As I look at your pictures/ And cherish sweet memories,A candle is lit in my heart."

This is just my opinion, but I would take out Because in the fourth stanza. I think it would flow better without it, but thats just me.

Either way its an awsome poem. very touching.

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Layla wrote a review · Sun Apr 26, 2009 9:32 pm

AAAAAAAAAAAAw that poem is sooo pretty. in the first line the word "in" i dont think is needd. in the second stanza when its like "as i hide in your closet and smell your shirts" sounds a little bit weird. but overall its really cool.



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